Like anyone, Roger’s family was constantly in a state of worry because no one knew when his time to leave them would come. However, even more so for Roger’s family, because the doctor predicted that he would only live to be 68, which was only one year after his diagnosis. Pancreatic cancer is a mean and violent disease. For Roger to live as long as he had was a miracle in itself – he is now 74. So the anticipation was amplified times ten for the Keaton family because their beloved Roger could literally be taken from them at any second.
He had good and bad days, but the adults in the family knew the time was nearing and they could hardly bare it.
The youngest of Roger’s children, his baby girl Lillian, walked to his side and broke down into flowing tears as she cried, “Daddy, I don’t know what I’m gonna do without you here.”
Roger replied with wisdom like he always did, and comforted Lillian with his kind words.
“Lil, let go of your own plan and accept God’s. I am prepared to stand at the gates of Heaven whenever my time comes, whether it be today or 10 years from now. You’ll always be my baby girl, and just as I have kept my eye on you since the day you were born, I will do the same even when I am gone.”
“I love you, daddy.”
“I love you too, Lily Pad.” He had called her that since she was a baby. Lily Pad. Lillian used to hate it, but hearing it now sounded so sweet.
Roger then called his oldest son Mark over to his bedside.
“Mark, you’re a good man. A great father. A faithful servant. An inspiring teacher. An encouraging friend. And not to mention, my favorite son ever.” (His only).
Holding back tears, Mark replied, “I will make you proud, Dad. I will honor this family and the Keaton name until-“
“I trust that you will, son. I have all the faith in you. Now don’t cry. You’re no wimp.” Roger always had a dry sense of humor. Somehow it made him obnoxious, but so charming at the same time. Everyone loved him.
The days passed slowly. Two weeks later, June 3rd, 2008 Roger Keaton passed away in that same St. Francis Hospital bed. His family mourned as they watched him take his last breath. An incredible mix of deep sorrow and adoring love filled the room as family members cried, and tried to process what was happening. Bible hymns were playing in the room as they were Roger’s favorite. The whole family sang along and smiled knowing that their father and granddad was right where he was supposed to be.
Bibliography
PDE Mahabharata. Link to reading.
Author's Note
I changed this story quite a bit, but writing it came so naturally.
This is a story taken from the death of Bhishma. He got to choose when he died, and he instructed others as to what to do when he died. Here, I took a more emotional approach. I wrote about a person who could not choose when to die, but was ready when the time came near. I included a real life situation with my main character's family being there and experiencing the pain of what was happening to him. I made the story into a more realistic version, or a more real life take on what went on in the PDE Mahabharata. I chose this generic picture because I thought it was just a sweet representation of a family. That's the most important thing about this story. The plot is based on the grandfather dying, but that is not meant to be the focus. It's about the love and respect the family has for each other and how that both makes his death harder, but leaves them with peace as well. I would say most of us have either personally suffered the loss of someone special to us, or have known someone who has lost a loved one. So I think this is relatable and makes an emotional connection to a reader more than the original Mahabharata version. It's more personal.
Family Portrait. Image source: online.
Hi Emma! I don't know if my first comment posted, so I am re-writing it here. I really enjoyed your adaptation of Bhishma's death to something very modern and easy to relate to. It is a very good writing strategy to utilize experiences that will speak to your reader on a personal level. I think we have all experienced, or known someone that has, the loss of a loved one. Your inclusion of the dialogue between Roger and his son really added a lot of emotional depth to the story too. Keep up the good work!
ReplyDeleteThis story is so beautiful, and I love how you were able to be inspired by Bhishma’s death scene. The dialogue between family members definitely created a strong dynamic to your story and made it super sad but super sweet. By making Roger unable to choose his time of death but accepted it anyway, it made the story more realistic and kind of hit home for me as well. Great job overall!
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ReplyDeleteThis story was very well written. The details, the story line, and the plot were all able to bring about the emotional tone. It looks like you definitely put in time to really think this story out, and your take on a modern twist was done so well. I like how you twisted up the story a little bit to make your story more of your own through the ability of the main character not being able to choose to die. This story keeps the elements of the original story, and your author's note was able to explain what your story was aiming to do. This is very well written, and I enjoyed reading it! Nice job!
The beginning paragraph was intense! It made me want to keep reading! It was a really good story, so much so that I thought it could be part of a movie! I didn’t see the connection though between the Mahabharata until I read your author’s note. It’d be cool if somehow you could put some of that info in your story to make the connection clearer. Good job!
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