i could make some changes to the scene where rama kills valid and helps sugriva. i kind of just want to change like the dynamic of the whole thing. maybe have rama kill vali in a different way so that his relationship with sugriva could be different
change meaning of “mahamatras” to the officials of the cat kingdom instead of monkeys
i like how tara refers to her husband as her hero thats cute
i think I would keep those gender roles the same even though in my story rama is a girl
i could make “the rainy season” super dramatic and make Rama go in to the kingdom even though he is not supposed to, plus it is the rainy season. I could make something dramatic happen when he enters
“armies of cats” … haha. I could make them all big cats! (not house cats) like panthers and/or tigers and/or lions and/or jaguars.
i could have the king of cats and king of mice instead of monkeys and bears. a little different vibe, but it would be cute
i will keep jatayu a bird because that makes sense he’s like a messenger bird and comes to tell them they are going in the right direction
i love the story of the birds and Sampati’s wings and how they got burnt, so i might really want to focus on that and change it up a little
i also like the part of Hanuman’s Leap. i could do a lot with that
also… hanuman and sita meeting
Ravana sets Hanuman’s tail on fire :-(
I like how Vibhishana leaves Ravana to ally with Rama
My favorite parts of this section were the story about the bird’s wings and how the bird himself told the story about how it happened and everything, and also Hanuman’s leap and him encountering the demon. I think I could do a lot with these stories
I want to focus on Sampati and Jatayu and how Sampati hurt his wings.
I might change the story and make something else cause the trouble …
like another bird flew into the brothers, and Sampati broke his wings diving to save him. also, I might make them a different kind of bird than a vulture… I don’t like vultures.
Sampati. Image Source: Blogspot.
Bibliography
Public Domain Ramayana. Link to text.
I really like where your story is heading for next week! Its a fun twist to make the monkeys in the story cats instead. I like the idea of making them more than just house cats! It plays to the warrior vibe that the monkey army had. One thing that might be interesting to focus on is showing how the cat army and the bird fight together. In cartoons, cats and birds don't always get along, so it would be a fun dynamic to play with! I look forward to reading your story.
ReplyDeleteHello! This looks like it will be such an interesting story! I can’t wait to read it! I like how dramatic you’re trying to make it. I think all the little changes will be so cool! I love including cats into my stories, I bet you’ll pull it off amazingly! I like how you put together the story planning, I’ve never tried it myself.
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